Date Posted:19:00:05 02/10/10 Wed Author:susiej Subject: Re: Doing my homework, like a good girl ;-) In reply to:
Debi
's message, "Doing my homework, like a good girl ;-)" on 12:06:21 02/07/10 Sun
I second Esther- a lot of people in a group and yet I never got lost and they all sounded unique. Good work!
I didn't catch any errors.
I didn't see the post where Ben attacked her. He seems like a good guy here. Of course, Valerie is surprised by that.
My only suggestion and this came after when I was trying to think of something to add- maybe the sister, Charlotte, should have a line or two. She didn't seem the type to never get a word in edgewise.
>I second Esther- a lot of people in a group and yet I
>never got lost and they all sounded unique. Good work!
>I didn't catch any errors.
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>I didn't see the post where Ben attacked her. He seems
>like a good guy here. Of course, Valerie is surprised
>by that.
His wife left him and he got drunk and decided he wanted to visit Valerie. Unannounced. When she didn't want to talk to him, he got nasty and tried to force himself on her. Between Taser, the dog, Daniel showing up and Valerie getting a lucky shot with her knee, he was sent packing. That's why she's pretty apprehensive about the visit.
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>My only suggestion and this came after when I was
>trying to think of something to add- maybe the sister,
>Charlotte, should have a line or two. She didn't seem
>the type to never get a word in edgewise.
I'll be expanding on this and Charlotte will get more lines. I just forgot about her whiel I was writing. Thanks for reminding me. She's working out to be an interesting character.
susiej