You made some really good points that will be incorporated into the rewrite, along with the suggestions from my classmates and instructor. I was trying to write in dialect and not make it too heavy handed. the setting is Appalachia, North Carolina to be specific and it's during the Depression. Some of the quibbles you had were with the dialect ('boar hog' for example. I don't know why, but if a rural Southerner refers to a large male pig, it's a boar hog.) I'll be doing some rewriting probably this weekend since, for the first time in weeks, I don't have a story to write or a test to study for, I don't even have notes to transcribe! I appreciate all your comments and will incorporate them in the retelling of Miriam's tale.
