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Date Posted: 07:14:25 04/06/12 Fri
Author: Lady Morilka
Subject: Re: Thought I'd post my homework here rather than as a new post. Check it out >>>
In reply to: Myxtress 's message, "Thought I'd post my homework here rather than as a new post. Check it out >>>" on 13:23:56 04/03/12 Tue

Hmmmm, you go my mind working, did you post this before? I am somehow sure I have read a thing about that locked before. But it might have been another scene.
As for your work, I don't have time for a detailed analysys, and since it is a homework I don't think it is aimed at one anyway.
I like this piece, there is a lot of silence that speakes volumes in there and a gtreat sense of forbording. But I am missing some depth here, her feelings are between guilt and fury, ok, but the range that is possible there (esp. with here remark to her own stupidity) is not really shown imho. And I would like to see some of here thoughts as she puts away the knife ;) she holds it at a precarious moment, does she put it away to have it out of reach? or because she knows it won't help anyway? It feels so much like a symbol but is than simply gone without having been used.
Great to have something to read again here :)
Hugs Lady Morilka

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[> [> [> Hey LadyM! Glad you could stop by >>> -- Myxtress, 22:11:51 04/07/12 Sat

Yup. You got me. I do believe I have posted something about this before, but it's been so long I can't remember for sure. And how sad is that??? Anyway...I started another homework, and you know with the whole life thing getting in the way, its only partially finished, and well...yeah, thanks for the whole being accountable thing. I'll do better next time. Promise. :-)

And you're right again that I wasn't expecting anything detailed, cause it's just a homework. But then you come up with the following, and wouldn't you know it? You're insightful comments let me foresee the potential in this little piece. So for sure, I'll strengthen the emotions and definitely put more attention to the knife and all it symbolizes.

Thank you!

And yes, it's good to have something happening on this board again. It's been silent for too long!

Hugs

Esther

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