Excellent suggestions all. I'll be going back and tweaking in just a bit.
>I love Kelly :D
So do I! I know she's only five, but I'm trying to make her a good, well-behaved child, yet still a child. I've known kids like this before, they're rare, but they exist.
I appreciate you kind words and your reminders to show, not tell. I forget that a lot in an effort to get the story out. Thanks!
