[ Show ]
Support VoyForums
[ Shrink ]
VoyForums Announcement:
Programming and providing support for this service has been a labor
of love since 1997. We are one of the few services online who values our users'
privacy, and have never sold your information. We have even fought hard to defend your
privacy in legal cases; however, we've done it with almost no financial support -- paying out of pocket
to continue providing the service. Due to the issues imposed on us by advertisers, we
also stopped hosting most ads on the forums many years ago. We hope you appreciate our efforts.
Show your support by donating any amount. (Note: We are still technically a for-profit company, so your
contribution is not tax-deductible.)
PayPal Acct: 
Feedback: 
Donate to VoyForums (PayPal):
| [ Login ] [ Contact Forum Admin ] [ Main index ] [ Post a new message ] [ Search | Check update time | Archives: 1, 2, 3, 4, 5, 6, 7, [8], 9, 10 ] |
[ Next Thread | Previous Thread | Next Message | Previous Message ]
Date Posted: 23:49:41 09/20/03 Sat
Author:
Author Host/IP: 24.165.96.234
Subject: someone who is good in English
Honestly, tell me if this is any good. I wrote it tonight, and it's just like...yeah...my depression is starting to come back, but is it like all, grammactially correct? I'm thinking of like giving it to a teacher or soemthing, so yeah.
******
Now I lay me down to sleep
I pray the Lord my soul to keep
Guide my safely through the nite
Wake me up with Morning's lite
I'm basically considered the average girl, mabye even above average. I earn straight A's in school, I'm small for sixteen. I have blue eyes, and brownish hair. I wear glasses. I play volleyball, I cheerlead. I'm pale, and I wear normal clothes. Nothing is special about my apperance, but if only they could see inside.
Why don't people realize what I really am? Why don't people realize all the pain, all the sorrow, all the hurt I feel? Why can't people see what all I burry deep inside, within my soul?
I hurt. I am broken, shattered, torn. I act like it's all ok, I stuff it all deeper inside. I try not to let anyone know what's all stuffed inside, because if I show the pain, everyone will see that I'm not perfect.
I feel like everything falls. I mean, everything is perfect, really it is. Nothing is wrong, everything is fine, seriously. I mean, why does it feel like this?
My parents divorced when I was young, I don't get along too hot with my older brother. Normal family life, eh? Then was was I chosen to deal with all this?
At times I feel like I'm hopeless. In all honesty, I feel that God has turned his on me, and I don't know what to do. I seriously feel like I'm going to fall, and get stuck, and that no one can help me.
Now I lay down in my bed
Awful thoughts rage in my head
And if I should die before I wake
Thank you Lord, for my soul you take.
*****
[ Next Thread | Previous Thread | Next Message | Previous Message ]
Replies:
- Firstly I prefer 'Night' and 'Light', its maybe (probs a typo), you could write "I am a cheerleader", its "bury" or "burrow". Other than that tis lovely, but seek some help lamb :) Everyone in the BC wubs yoo, so enjoy your time in the BC rather than bringing your outside life in (NT) -- Jen, 07:05:26 09/21/03 Sun
