Date Posted:13:34:22 05/25/01 Fri Author: zeina Subject: well i've already told you that this made me almost ashamed for ever writing. i thought it was absolutely incredible. absolutely everything here works for me. i mean EVERYTHING apart from the butterfly waterfall bit (sounds pretentious or something like that). but lulke i seriosuly think this is the best thing i've ever seen of yours. In reply to:
luke
's message, "Kind of inspired by 'By Grand Central Station I sat down and wept'" on 06:43:14 05/08/01 Tue
I like the idea behind the poem, and the developement throughout. Some of the description in here is really good. It manages to both please and shock the reader at the same time, which is impressive. However, the use of 'like' can be a bit tedious, or is there an ulterior motive in its use? Overall, very challenging and very well written.
