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Subject: Arrival

Author:
Paul

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Date Posted: 20:01:24 10/08/07 Mon

Arrival.

The key turned,
Clicking loud to the night air,
Her tender hand quivering,
As the door swung to it�s own tune,
The corridor stretched,
Deep into the velvet darkness,
To where the staircase rose stark
from the dank, urine stained passage,
To the landing and room five,
The click of stiletto on parquet floor,
Echoed to the sway of her hips,
Whilst the lamp holder hung,
devoid of bulb,
Her heart pounding,
She hurried through the gloom,
Climbing the stairs to the swish,
Of her nylon clad thighs,
One more key,
Fumbling in the dark,
Panting with fear,
Unable to find the lock,
When the thick hand came,
To smother all screams,
Lifting her heels from the carpet,
The snap was swift,
She crumpled,
He faded along the corridor,
The door swinging to it�s own tune,
That enveloped him and his evil deed,

� Paul Osborne 2007.

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[> Subject: Re: Arrival
Author: Sasha [ Edit \| View ]	Date Posted: 20:14:07 10/08/07 Mon ~ Wow!!! Paul, this is a suspenseful piece... had me on the edge of my seat, whilst I was reading it a powerfully visual poem...my heart sank for her... and don't worry, I know this is just a poem...lol kiwi hugs Sash xx

[> Subject: Re: Arrival

Author:
Paul
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Date Posted: 07:04:16 10/09/07 Tue

Sash, This image, and the following events, are a collage of dark, that has a basis in childhood dreams,I used to have one where I could not get my key in the lock,and a terrible figure was running towards me,...The girl? She just formed my suspense! Also smiling you know me that well....Now where did I put my balaclava and black gloves?........Kidding!

Peace and hugs,

Paul

[> Subject: Re: Arrival
Author: andy [ Edit \| View ]	Date Posted: 17:20:35 10/09/07 Tue Paul, Gripping write! The footnotes were nice to read as well. thanks, andy

[> Subject: Re: Arrival
Author: Paul [ Edit \| View ]	Date Posted: 11:37:27 10/10/07 Wed Andy, Putting myself into the scene has never been hard, it's just getting my pen to see it the same way! Glad you liked, Peace and hope, Paul

[> Subject: Re: Arrival
Author: Jen [ Edit \| View ]	Date Posted: 05:18:30 11/05/07 Mon Paul~ I love this poem, rather a tiny story! Excellent visual, beautifully written. Awesome! Jen

[> Subject: Re: Arrival
Author: The Staff [ Edit \| View ]	Date Posted: 06:44:19 11/05/07 Mon Jen WELCOME TO THE MOTEL WE APPRECIATE YOU STOPPING BY AND HOPE TO SEE YOU AGAIN