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Subject: Re: Burning eyes


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Lori S. Maynard
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Date Posted: 19:09:16 02/04/02 Mon
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In reply to: icyheart 's message, "Burning eyes" on 23:28:36 02/03/02 Sun
 "As my eyes burn from tears freely falling
I hear the fear of the unknown calling"

I believe these are your two strongest lines. They compliment each other well in flow and sound.

"Freely falling"
"hear the fear"

Nice use of sound! :)

Lori
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