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Date Posted: 22:46:28 02/01/00 Tue
Author: eli
Subject: Re: Shallow Feeling, Deep Despair
In reply to: Gunslinger 's message, "Shallow Feeling, Deep Despair" on 19:06:22 01/31/00 Mon

the only crit that i can find in this piece is with the rhyme, smile, defiled. the rest of the rhymes in the poem are all perfect except for these two. i can understand using this effect if it were done more than once, but in the case of this poem i would alter it so that it fits with the rest of the rhymes.

its good though to see that there is still someone out there who appreciates rhymed poetry.

> Shallow feeling, deep despair-
> How I hate that dreadful pair...
> Although you may not understand
> The two of them go hand in hand.
> Shallow feelings sponsor lies-
> You find too late, to your surprise
> The vows of love and that �forever�
> All too soon, rescind to �never�.
> Artistic fools, the poets know-
> Poor, mad Edgar Allen Poe
> The tapping at the sill or door-
> The wretched cry of, �Nevermore�.
> Nevermore to wear a smile-
> Conscience ever more defiled-
> Despair so deep one cannot sound-
> Nor bottom of the slough is found..
> Death is close upon you stealing
> All because of shallow feeling.

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Replies:

Re: Shallow Feeling, Deep Despair (Better?) -- Gunslinger, 08:06:15 02/02/00 Wed
- Re: Shallow Feeling, Deep Despair (Better?) -- eli, 10:08:47 02/02/00 Wed
- Re: Shallow Feeling, Deep Despair (Better?) -- Paul Douglas, 18:04:28 02/02/00 Wed
- Re: Shallow Feeling, Deep Despair (Better?) -- sandie_1308, 08:46:07 02/06/00 Sun