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Subject: 自己不通語法就不要評論別人的語法


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就不要說話讓人家有機會笑
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Date Posted: 21:51:52 09/04/02 Wed
In reply to: 不識蒙混過關就不要讀詩,不要寫詩,不要評詩 's message, "將個別句子的回應一般化為文學理論去批評別人缺乏閱讀經驗" on 21:11:50 09/04/02 Wed

>冇人要以散文規笵量度詩,寫任何句子句意不清楚效果達不到?>漪O駕馭不了文字,與寫某類詩故意追求不清楚不完滿是兩回事
>,本來想故意寫得唔清楚人地睇落卻清清楚楚,那就容易變成?>矕鰣齯禲A變成句意效果不清楚,二者不能混為一談。
>
>「背後而蛙們在對峙唱」這句的句意效果不清楚因為全首詩不?>O以類此句法寫成,全首詩的隱藏標點或斷句方式非常簡單直接
>清楚唯獨這句不清楚,所以建議在「背後」後斷,這是個別例?>l,不能一概而論。
>
>既看見完整的日光
>薰在墨綠的詩社版面
>風帶來一些陌生的名字
>點頭示好並附上支持
>我們的玫瑰收起刺
>坐在灼燙的大道上
>
>既看見遠行而歸的朋友
>帶著橙百合、雛菊和
>我的小白花碰面
>每個人的面上酒紅
>滿樹的幽靈起舞
>荒漠隱匿在太陽
>--本來「背後」放在「太陽」背後就相安無視,故意放在下句?>P下句黐埋就與前後的格調不接,同時顯得唔清楚,效果也沒有
>什麼特別之處,怕之你係百歲冀英文學神童閱讀經驗比我多一?>妐U倍,有什麼關係?我回應一句而被人引申為詩應否被散文規?>S,推而廣之,淡而化之,蒙而混之,有冇搞錯?
>背後而蛙們在對唱
>新鮮的歌
>
>(愉快的笑著
>重疊重疊的影像
>徘徊不去
>小草在嘆息
>年輕時候的承諾
>久久沒有兌現)
>
>既看見鮮花
>中大的山水和
>敬仰的老師
>既遇見將行惜別
>的程序如漫天粉落
>的傳單直至
>今晚特別圓大的月亮
>把我送到火車站
>
>直至朋友們終於
>提起手告別
>錯落地
>
>
>一次又一次
>我仍然忘記了拍照
>為了今年畢業以後
>擁有一份
>完整的相底

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