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Date Posted: 08:55:30 03/30/02 Sat
Author: HaiWolfe
Subject: Re: Back to the Past.
In reply to: Beth Brownell 's message, "Back to the Past." on 06:21:34 03/28/02 Thu

Finished reading the six chapters you have up here a while ago. It's interesting to read so far, and it generally flows very well.

Just a few things I noticed while reading that you may want to look into.. first, Tari seems to take it all in stride a bit too much when she first meets Aragorn and Legolas and finds out who they are. I mean, even though she's a descendent of Tolkien himself, it's a little hard to believe right off the bat that some previously-thought-of-as-fictional characters suddenly appeared in your woods.

Second, make sure to check the vocabulary of the characters that came from Middle-Earth. They would probably use contractions less often, and not say words like "weird," or "no offense."

Other than that, you're doing well. Keep up the good work!

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