Re: Call I Will Be There -- Write On Poetry Forum II

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Subject: Re: Call I Will Be There

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Moonchild

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Date Posted: 10:44:27 03/06/02 Wed
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In reply to: HopeS 's message, "Call I Will Be There" on 07:03:38 03/06/02 Wed

Hope, this is really beautiful and you know I love your poems :) With this one though, I would take out the title line in each verse and just save it for the last verse (only put it in the last verse.) You might want to keep every verse 4 lines though and it sure is your poem to do what you want. I'm just making a suggestion on how I would do it :) Very pleasant read!

>Call I Will Be There
>
>Breath life to my dream
>With wind in our hair
>The beach at sunset
>Call I will be there
>
>With romantic flavour
>Beauty everywhere
>Let spirits be lifted
>Call I will be there
>
>Embrace the exciting
>Seducing with dare
>Into awaiting hands
>Call I will be there
>
>Love song serenade
>Of souls being bare
>Be filled with desire
>Call I will be there
>
>As moonlight shines
>On climbing a stair
>Dreaming together
>Call I will be there
>
>Rendevous dreamer
>Anytime, anywhere
>Name me the place
>Call I will be there
>
>Hope� 2002

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