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Date Posted: 15:12:36 12/02/04 Thu
Author: Anonymous
Subject: Re: Help Rate this poem
In reply to: 's message, "Help Rate this poem" on 12:52:14 12/24/03 Wed

>To completely invest your emotions within someone is
>the hardest thing to do
>Especially after what has happened to you
>But I still ask for you to take the risk with me
>Because I think we could really be
>If you could only realize I love what?s inside
>Along with the beauty you carry outside
>And I know that you blame
>Your broken heart on love because love hurts, love is
>pain
>But broken pieces can be fixed
>Once you find that someone who can give your torn
>heart a stitch.
>That someone could be right under your nose
>Maybe even wearing unconventional clothes
>Like socks that reach up to his knees
>And just maybe that person?s special someone is
>Chinese.
>
>
>Background: I wrote this poem to try and win over
>this girl, who is from China and moved here 6 or 7
>years ago. She writes poetry (one of her poems is
>titled Love hurts, Love is pain, notice the
>connection). But I?ve never written a poem before and
>I was kind of hoping the best way to a poet?s heart is
>poetry so I tried it out. And by the way, I always
>wear socks that are high and come close to my knees
>(which I fashion pretty well, j/k). I would really
>appreciate some feedback and suggestions before I give
>it to her so if you guys could email me at
>forthrightpunx27@bellsouth.net it would be much
>appreciated.

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