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Date Posted: 12:48:41 12/24/03 Wed
Author: Anonymous
Subject: Help Rate this poem
In reply to: 's message, "New Poetry site for submiting of poems (FREE)" on 12:09:25 12/21/02 Sat

To completely invest your emotions within someone is the hardest thing to do
Especially after what has happened to you
But I still ask for you to take the risk with me
Because I think we could really be
If you could only realize I love what’s inside
Along with the beauty you carry outside
And I know that you blame
Your broken heart on love because love hurts, love is pain
But broken pieces can be fixed
Once you find that someone who can give your torn heart a stitch.
That someone could be right under your nose
Maybe even wearing unconventional clothes
Like socks that reach up to his knees
And just maybe that person’s special someone is Chinese.


Background: I wrote this poem to try and win over this girl, who is from China and moved here 6 or 7 years ago. She writes poetry (one of her poems is titled Love hurts, Love is pain, notice the connection). But I’ve never written a poem before and I was kind of hoping the best way to a poet’s heart is poetry so I tried it out. And by the way, I always wear socks that are high and come close to my knees (which I fashion pretty well, j/k). I would really appreciate some feedback and suggestions before I give it to her so if you guys could email me at forthrightpunx27@bellsouth.net it would be much appreciated.

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  • Re: Let It Slip Away -- Anonymous, 12:00:54 02/05/04 Thu
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