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Date Posted: 04:29:41 03/03/01 Sat
Author: Raphaela
Subject: Re: highlander sent me here.... so what do u think?
In reply to: holland 's message, "highlander sent me here.... so what do u think?" on 02:35:14 03/03/01 Sat

Well a Highlander recommendation is one to be respected - from the point of view of the writer and those privileged to read and share.

I have read all three poems (you may in future wish to post each one separately so you get fuller comments on each piece):

Re What I cannot name
This poem speaks volumes in what it does not say. The undertones of the poem reveal an underlying sadness - as if you are writing from your soul - so the poem has integrity, it means something and this shows in your writing. The flow is good and I personally would not change anything apart from putting the abbreviations into full words as (2 = to etc) as this would give more maturity to your writing -the imagery of the last two lines stands out - perhaps we could discuss sometime? an excellent poem though in my humble opinion.

Re Look
Although this poem is simpler in format, I feel it links on in theme from the previous one, with an underlying sadness. Again I wouldn't use the abbreviations but if that is your style - ignore me.

Re I have found
The tone of this poem is more assertive and resentful - as if the sadness has given way to a tortured soul.

Perhaps I am reading too much into your writing, but if you are experiencing sadness, writing it out is an excellent therapy and in my experience keeps you sane.

Keep writing and posting!

Raphaela

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