re: Deep As One II ~blushing I forgot..... -- Unicorn

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Date Posted: 04:52:06 05/30/02 Thu
Author: sp99
Author Host/IP: pool-63.53.132.148.nwrk.grid.net / 63.53.132.148
Subject: re: Deep As One II ~blushing I forgot.....
In reply to: AAAAGGGSSS 's message, "Re: Deep As One" on 20:25:28 05/28/02 Tue

Would be .. a rewrite and then the next major work I
do on this piece is some trimming and change the little
Indians into Polictians [sp?] diguising
themselves as Indians
to cast the Native Americans into a bad light???
Under your comment is the present revise...hehe.
When I get this machine behaving better, I'll be back
more often....after all, we are poetic friends, yes?'-p
Thanks for reading!!!
sp99

>Wow SuSanne, this was coolo !!
>
>Well, if you were a bird, this was a complete
>description of each and every feather, hehe :). I
>liked some of the begining stuff, I thought the
>be3ginning stuff made me feel naked, and that idiom of
>the vaporous all seeing well was just a little too
>much, well it was ok actually, but heavy duty. I
>think the poem had a haunting quality to it actually,
>and a searing, well you did mention that, which
>attempted to seep in closer and closer, which of
>course I like. It had a radiance Su. The facts and
>everthing that you allude to just cloak or camaflouge
>the fact. Somehow the meanings were attached to the
>fact you used, like little indians hiding behind trees
>and movingin closer and closer, hehe :) well at any
>rate it was warm and sensual, well I thought so. You
>have to come here more and stop gong to those other
>poetry boards, hehe. Just kidding, love ya, al

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Whoops ~ lol -- sp99, 04:55:15 05/30/02 Thu