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Date Posted: 04:56:51 06/10/02 Mon
Author: Gemini
Author Host/IP: webcacheB10a.cache.pol.co.uk / 195.92.168.172
Subject: Re: An Answer
In reply to: SuSanne 's message, "An Answer" on 13:16:06 06/08/02 Sat

Hi Susanne,
I admire the way you can write poetically about seemingly anything, wish I could.
I truly understand where you are coming from, as you I want to learn also about lots of things, esp poetry.
Like you I wish other people, (the title poet has to be earned), would give a true critique of my attempts so that I may also learn what pleases. But as I have said before it is all so personal and one can only ever say that to me this is good or that isn't, but none of us truly know anything about what makes a poem good or bad. (well maybe very bad !!! which yours are not.)
Relax with it Susanne, you write some good stuff.

Regards
Gem.x
keep writing.

> >color=purple>
>AN ANSWER
>
>
>Why I'm so hung up
>Is the teaching of myself.
>Attempting to learn
>Trim and svelte.
>
>Not only of poetry
>Also a slow computer burn
>Into my memory banks
>For learning, I so yearn.
>
>To understand my faults
>I trust on feedback
>Teaching me more
>Of which sometimes, I so lack.
>
>From one board to another
>My attempts are placed
>Wanting gentle honestly
>To perhaps help me, save my face.
>
>Of not writing, if not needed
>Since who if any, has time to waste?
>With lack of comments, haven't been able to heed
>That my poems need more, than just copy and paste.
>
>I am not angry or even upset,
>Just grateful I finally got an honest answer
>Though still finding it hard that it applies to all
>My poems, reading like a gaudy dancer.
>
>But if this is true,
>Must learn to swallow my pride
>Taking stock to reassess
>How to save my little writer's hide.
>
>
>� SuSanne &*_*&
>
>8.6.02~smb.powell
>All rights reserved
> >color=purple>

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