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Date Posted: 01:44:55 03/02/03 Sun
Author: Raphaela
Author Host/IP: webcacheB04a.cache.pol.co.uk / 195.92.168.166
Subject: Re: Walk
In reply to: the other version AGS 's message, "Re: Walk" on 14:16:48 03/01/03 Sat

I prefer this version Al - it just seemed to flow better and be more meaningful. I really loved it and found it very moving. Thank you for sharing.

There is some repetition - not sure if this is intentional or not as it also works.

Raphaela

>The nectar is sweet
>flows its path
>with stickinesses
>that pulls, tugs
>all surroundings
>bears all
>
>I saw you atop
>the hill
>standing
>with your focus
>that gathered
>me so easily
>into your frame
>
>saw my gerters
>so riveted
>and a frame
>on which to lean:
>understood interrogation
>
>It is always that way
>in spring
>when flowers laugh
>show to one another
>their own sweets,
>and special fragrances;
>they long to elope
>ride your horses
>with the wind
>
>a wind that daffodils
>that covered the pine crest
>forest knew
>when you had that picnic
>months and months
>ago
>
>smelled all tinglinesses
>of a sap that
>well
>flowed
>
>in its oozing
>
>and always eyes
>somewhere that
>interrogated
>the proper
>glue
>
>you know
>
>Your walk is easy;
>on grass that refused to slip
>as you came down -
>along so slowly;
>in a gently march
>that said
>the grass is wet
>today ..
>and looked
>
>each of your steps
>a grandeur, all
>mentioned
>yes I find the ground
>so full
>the waters
>feel exactly
>my depth in this walk
>how I must step
>and make it
>slowly
>all the way
>to you

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