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Date Posted: 09:07:56 07/08/02 Mon
Author: CJ
Author Host/IP: ip101.til2.pacifier.com / 66.43.13.101
Subject: Re: Visual Eyes of the 25
In reply to: SuSanne 's message, "Visual Eyes of the 25" on 16:16:36 07/07/02 Sun

I believe i grasp your meaning here, but somewhere between you and the average reader the words took a wrong turn. I agree with Al and i think it could be said more simply.

He rose up strong
Spilling out
Shaking the void
Picking constantly
Wiping away hope
Stroking fear
When he was all alone
He sat comfortably
In his large chair
Sighing loudly
Filling the day with
Foul air.

> >color=navy>
>VISUAL EYES OF THE 25
>
>
>The advertisement cries out
>To one down on their luck
>Letting them know even good people
>Are unlucky enough to have bad credit
>Which these Lenders are glad to repair!
>If `hard luck Charlie' or Charlene
>Wants a car to get to work
>Soothing without small print mentioning
>How they rape you with interest
>So if or when the car breaks down
>It forces double payments
>For nothing that can be seen
>Except possibilities in the long run,
>Robbing Perk's life.
>
>For again Perk's time to earn
>Overtime money, went before Lent
>As now living time is commuting
>Bus after bus or maybe a train or two
>Mayhap a train, bus, train
>To bus, train, bus of what a bust.
>Sometimes adding mental pain,
>Other times, what a humanity gain
>If enjoying having a people view
>Of connections, but then there are those
>Quiet of heart breaking times,
>When one so prays, for another's child,
>Not being able to touch or hug.
>
>So good and still was he,
>Yet upset enough
>To make a small fuss in the back of the bus
>After being forced from a favored front seat.
>Then quiet again until a quick cry of no�ooo
>As he's dragged off, the number 25.
>
>Was it leaving air conditioning
>In 99 degrees of Midnight?
>Or watching the sidewalks go by
>Without him walking upon them?
>Could it possibly be,
>His Mother works the streets?
>Or just is an everyday cranky
>Hard working factory worker,
>Who had just treated him to a movie?
>But that very last cry after a brief ride
>Leaves his sweet self intertwined
>Forevermore of verse in prayers
>Of unshed tears imprinted deeply
>Within this soul's .. Visual eyes.
>
>
>
>� SuSanne &*_*&
>
>3.7.02~smb.powell
>Draft 1~all rights reserved
>
>
>*...Perk's....* I believe a slang term
>used by those of somewhat shady trades,
>when speaking of their potential victims???
>
>

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