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Date Posted: 14:36:21 01/21/01 Sun
Author: Highlander
Subject: Re: The Glass Turret
In reply to: Raphaela 's message, "Re: The Glass Turret" on 09:14:14 01/21/01 Sun

Hi Raphaela, I know you changed it a bit as I just read the original thru again in my "Waterbook Collections". I would like to make a personal point about writing that may or may not help you..I like different versions of work, for example my first ever poem was entitled Trash TV where I take a swipe at sit coms, soaps, gunfights and San Francisco Police cars..I have Trash TV extended version, Trash TV cable, Trash TV pay per view, Trash TV late at night and so on...I did this because I couldn�t choose which one so I split them up into a TV page if you like...now you probably can�t do this with Glass Turret but my suggestion is either do what I did with TV or post the very first work coz that�s how you grabbed it, you plucked it out of the air, just remember Raphaela that "perfection is a moving target" You go crazy trying to make it better and better and in actual fact all that is probably required is maybe a little break here or stanza split there or maybe even a spelling or puncto error at the worst but I always try and encourage writers that I adore to not go looking too hard.I personally think the poem is a beautiful piece with marvellous pictures but I know you�re gonna blow it and get fed up with it if you keep rearranging...all in all Highlander says keep it as it is but check the stanza status. Love&Peace great writer & friend...Stephen X

>Thanks Highlander - I have changed it slightly since
>you read it - this was my third attempt! I have tried
>to tighten the lines but am still not happy with it
>but will look at it again in light of Rafael's
>suggestions.
>
>Raphaela

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Re: The Glass Turret -- Raphaela, 14:56:57 01/21/01 Sun
- Re: The Glass Turret -- Highlander, 15:35:22 01/21/01 Sun