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Date Posted: 12:05:32 02/07/02 Thu
Author: Scott Plumbtree
Subject: Re: My song....
In reply to: Shirley 's message, "My song...." on 16:57:08 02/05/02 Tue

Hey Shirley,

Thanks for posting. Before I start just want to let you know that these are only opinions and take anything I say as serious or "un"serious as you want. I think this song is a really good idea. As a matter of fact, I am in the middle of writing a song fairly similar to this idea only mine has to do with sort of the reverse in that the other person is apparently not interested. This definitely is a great start but I think that it is necessary to go back and look at some of the questions you leave unanswered.

1) Why is your lover so hurt? Is it ONLY because the words I Love You haven't been said. I guess I can see your point if that is the case but it just seems something here is being left out.

2) Why is it such a problem for the person in the song to say I Love You, I mean if you are bringing home roses and doing everything right and you realize that the other person wants to hear this, what is holding you back? I think that's the most confusing part I'm having with the song.

3) The last line of the chorus is confusing. "But if I didn't tell you how would you know" It seems the whole chorus is saying why the other person should know yet the last line says that they wouldn't know unless I told them. Do you see what I'm saying here.

I think that you have a great idea here. What needs to be done, and this is definitely the hardest part of song writing, is to go back and see where you want the destination of the song to be. In other words, what do you want this song to be about. Do you want it to be She should know because of all the things I do for her or should it be a song where you realize all of the things you do don't mean as much as saying the words.

Let me know what thoughts or questions you might have about this and I'll be glad to give you my best answers. Thanks for posting!!

Scott


>If I Didn’t Tell You (How Would You Know?)
>
>
>
>
>I came home from work today
>And handed you a rose bouquet
>But I didn’t say a word
>I could see inside you hurt
>So I went into the next room; poured myself a drink
>Felt you wanted to be alone, and me, I had to think
>I know you want to hear the words but I don’t make a
>sound
>But if you’re wonderin’ if I love you, honey, look
>around
>
>{chorus?}
>Evidence is in these walls if you could only see
>It’s a sanctuary full of love that I give faithfully
>Though I may not say the words that you so long to hear
>Doesn’t the way I look at you make all things crystal
>clear
>Everyday when I come home to you, the love will only
>grow
>But if I didn’t tell you, how would you know?
>
>Do you remember the day that we both said I do
>I’d made my mind up that I’d always be one true to you
>And that’s something that I promise you will never
>change
>If there’s anything you need from me, I will arrange
>So, if hearing, “I love you” is what you really need
>I’ll say it over and over then until we are both agreed
>That it’s been there all along; it’s something you
>can’t hardly miss
>But until I say those words, I hope that you’re aware
>of this:
>
>(Repeat chorus)
>
>copyright: SFCC

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