Date Posted:13:16:44 11/06/10 Sat Author: Page (who can't seem to stay logged in!) Subject: You know what? You're spot on! (As always!) >>>> In reply to:
Esther
's message, "Hey Page! Comments this way >>>" on 12:09:53 10/26/10 Tue
(And sorry it's taken me so long to reply. My desktop computer is down and out, and I now officially hate my laptop. But I digress....)
After I read your comments I went back and re-read this chapter along with the preceding chapter and the one following it. And I realized I don't need this one. Like you said, I can get this information across in different ways in other chapters. As it's written now it breaks up the story and really doesn't add anything to the book other than extraneous words (which I really, really don't need!) So why did I re-write it and keep it in? For no other reason than it was in the first draft. *hits self in forehead* This had made me go back and view with a critical eye the rest of this book. I've been so fixated with "fixing" what's already been written, taking out the plethora of "that"s and "was"s and similar unnecessary words, hunting for lurking adverbs *g*, and other editing stuff, that I never looked at each of these bits in context with the rest of the book. So many of them I don't need. I've rewritten them and edited them without realizing I don't need them just because I wrote them two years ago. (OMG, I've been working on this stupid book for two freakin' years! Too long!)
So here I go with revision #890,876,264,268. And when I'm done I'm hopeful there will be no more distinct pauses that don't need to be there, the information presented will be concise and tight, and I'll finally be content with it.
You have my undying gratitude for pointing this out. Thanks to you I now can see the forest without being distracted by the trees!
