Date Posted:13:06:56 10/24/09 Sat Author:Page Subject: Two very excellent examples >>>>> In reply to:
dea
's message, "Page >>>" on 11:24:44 10/22/09 Thu
You've done a brilliant job of smoothly incorporating backstory without losing the flow of the story, or boring the reader. That's what I'm after! *G* In your first excerpt, I love the way you describe Ashton switching to autopilot. I think almost everyone does that very thing at one time or another, and it's was a very familiar way to introduce Ashton's previous thoughts about Bryony, so he could compare those with his impressions of the actual woman in front of him. And in your second excerpt, you again used something that's going to be very familiar to your readers -- two people getting to know each other, telling about their parents. Everyone does that. It was very easy, very smooth, and you incorporated some very important parts of the character's lives without overkill.
Thank you so much for sharing those, and giving me some ideas!
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