Date Posted:12:29:08 10/25/09 Sun Author:Debi Subject: I think everyne's hit the high points In reply to:
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's message, "Once upon a time....>>>>" on 15:13:52 10/20/09 Tue
>This is the beginning of a chapter. This chapter
>falls after Adam and Jay have put together Shadowed
>Knight. It's January 1969, and one month before Katie
>leaves Adam, so you'll know where we're at. After
>this opening, we get back into present-day action in
>January:
>
I didn't lose interest but it's like my first intro to Old Dogs, it just didn't have that "oomph". Starting with Walter seemed a little odd to me too, since he doesn't seem to figure prominently in the subsequent story. Maybe starting with a little bit of Jay's Story Thus Far, show him meeting Walter, discussing his rep in the business, that sort of thing. That way you can get the infor without just telling it all in one lump. As always, JMHO, take what you like, leave the rest.
I'd obsessed over how much backstory to add, how much to leave out, where to begin, whose POV it should be, etc., and didn't realize my voice was noticeably absent throughout the whole thing. And no matter how technically right I might get it, if the voice isn't there, then it won't fly. Thank you so much for pointing that out! I'm still struggling with this piece, but I've made some progress. Y'all were all right on the mark about using Jay's POV. And since I can hear Jay, I think perhaps the voice will return to the piece as I continue to work on it.
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