Date Posted:15:49:15 10/25/09 Sun Author:Page Subject: You pointed out something interesting I'd missed >>>> In reply to:
Debi
's message, "I think everyne's hit the high points" on 12:29:08 10/25/09 Sun
>it just didn't have that "oomph".
I'd obsessed over how much backstory to add, how much to leave out, where to begin, whose POV it should be, etc., and didn't realize my voice was noticeably absent throughout the whole thing. And no matter how technically right I might get it, if the voice isn't there, then it won't fly. Thank you so much for pointing that out! I'm still struggling with this piece, but I've made some progress. Y'all were all right on the mark about using Jay's POV. And since I can hear Jay, I think perhaps the voice will return to the piece as I continue to work on it.
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