Date Posted:18:45:20 07/25/10 Sun Author:debikm Subject: Beautiful...wow... In reply to:
Page
's message, "Found! >>>>" on 18:05:12 07/25/10 Sun
I love this. Really. It makes me want to cry with how sweet, but real it is. Everything is awkward and uncomfortable and neither of them was the one to break things off. How much more real and human can characters get? Page, you've made me so happy to see how they've managed to find each other again.
Now to try and come up with something myself. I've only been trying since yesterday...
Making someone cry is good, right? It made me feel good, twisted as that sounds. LOL! Thank you! Since it's the first (and very rough) draft I've still got some fleshing out to do, but your reaction about the feel of scene lets me know not to screw too much with it.
Now to write the follow up from Geoff's POV. All I have so far is:
"It didn't matter how much of a shock it was; he could have handled it better. After so many years of having his every utterance dissected by the music press and by over-analytical fans, he'd learned not to blurt out the first thing that came into his head. But he'd done just that when Sherry had shown him her belly. Geoff cringed, imagining a future conversation with his child:
'Hey, Dad, what did you say when Mum told you she was pregnant with me?'
'Well, son, I said, "Is it mine?"'
Oh, bloody hell."
debikm