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Date Posted: 11:59:57 07/31/10 Sat
Author: 
debikm
Subject: Rayne and Garoben
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's message, "In the immortal words of Nickelback....." on 00:21:59 07/31/10 Sat
Yes, Rayne has been asking me to pay more attention lately. I'm more than happy to do so for my old friend.
This is somewhat late in the Story as it stands. Rayne's been pretty jaded by her years outlawed, thanks to her former lover and his less-than-legal activities; Rayne is guilty by association. Hired by a nobleman to help him with a certain task, that task is done and Rayne has parted ways with the Duke under less tha ideal circumstances. But the Dukes guard captian decided to come with her and her friends because he was taken with her. Rayne doesn't feel deserving of his attention, but Garoben doesn't give up and Rayne finally allows herself to be loved. This scene is their first time together.
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Walking down the corridor to their rooms, they had meant to go to Rayne’s room but Garoben pushed open the door to his and drew her inside quickly, kicking the door closed and pinning her to the wall with his body to kiss her.
Taken by surprise, Rayne was breathless and surprised by her own urgency. Everything fell away; only he and she existed right then. Fumbling with her clothing, she felt
Garoben lean back, giving her some room. Trying to untie the lacing at the neck of her tunic at the same time she was hopping trying to get her boots off without her hands, she only managed to tangle it further. With a curse, she reached to her waist for the knife there, but Garoben caught her wrist as he kicked his own boots aside.
“I’ll do it.”
Tugging her to follow, he crossed the room to the fire, disarming her and laying the knife on the mantle. Then he found the knot and began to worry it with his fingers. “You really did a good job tangling this… that doesn’t mean anything, does it?”
“That I’m an idiot?” She chuckled, watching his face as he concentrated on picking the tangle apart. His lips curled into a small smile.
“Not at all. A bit rushed maybe.”
“For good reason.”
He stopped and looked at her, the flames reflected in his eyes. His gaze dropped to her lips and he leaned in, brushing his mouth against hers. Rayne leaned into his touch, opening her mouth, letting her tongue slip inside.
His fingers were still wrapped in the lacing; his arms tightened and the lace broke with a snap. In the same motion he pushed the tunic back off her shoulders, his arms wrapping around to hold her, arms still tangled in her sleeves. His mouth slid from her lips to her throat, her neck, making her shiver. A small contented sound came from her throat and he raised his face again, looking at her with a chuckle.
“I must be doing something right.”
“Mmm… It’ll do.”
Garoben’s face split into a broad grin, his eyes wide with mock indignance. “I suppose I’ll just have to try harder.”
“Speaking of harder...” She leaned into him, pressing her hips against the bulge.
“That’s it…” He stripped her tunic off, her fingers, once freed, unlacing her bodice and breeches. As they slid away she pushed his jerkin open, and tugged the hem of his tunic up. He obliged by pulling the garments up and off.
As soon as his chest was bare, her mouth was on him, suckling, nipping, making him groan. His fingers fumbled with the waist of his breeches; her nails traced along his ribs and chest, bringing gooseflesh in their wake. Rayne rubbed her nose on a stiffened nipple and put her mouth on him again, breathing a soft chuckle at the heartfelt moan he produced. There was a rustle of clothing, then he stood before her, bare as a babe. He glowed golden in the firelight and her breath caught in her throat.
“What?”
Her gaze traced over him, from his long legs, lean torso to his beautiful face, eyes alight with wonder. She chuckled, low and throaty. “I’ve decided I’m dreaming.”
“I’ll prove you aren’t.”
Drawing her to him, he leaned over her, his lips brushing her ear, whispering. “If you are, then I am too.” His fingers buried themselves in her hair and his body was fever hot against hers. He turned her face up and she met his kiss with fervor, her hands roaming over his hips, his back, scratching her nails along his skin. His arousal surged between them, like a blind creature, seeking home.
Now his hands explored her with equal abandon, stroking her buttocks, cupping her hips, coming around to grasp her breasts. His calloused fingers brushed the nipples, sending a jolt along her nerves and his chuckle rumbled near her ear. Leaning her head back, she laid her throat bare to him, trusting him. Arms wrapping her to support, he nibbled a path to her breasts, pulling the tender nipple into his mouth. Her insides melted and she groaned.
There was a strong need, pushing her, goading her and she dug her fingers into his back. They made their way to his bed, Garoben pausing long enough to peel the covers back before he pressed Rayne into the mattress. He rose over her, regarding her in the glow of firelight, sitting astride her hips. Frowning, she reached for him, to pull him down, pull him in.
“Shh… we’ve got plenty of time.”
He leaned down, his legs tightening around her, his breath hot on her cheek and she forgot to be impatient.
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Re: Rayne and Garoben -- Page2, 11:42:57 08/01/10 Sun
This is wonderful. You captured the passion between them as well as their playfulness and ease with one another. I really love it and makes me want to read more.
Great job!
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The tunic string? Priceless! >>> -- Page, 21:12:16 08/03/10 Tue
Your writing is always so vivid and immediate, and it's things like Rayne's tunic string that make it so. I mean, no matter how much you envision your first time with someone you want, some little something is going to get messed up, and that string getting all tangled was so spot-on real it would make anyone identify immediately with this scene. I also love the way you tied (not a pun, but it would've been a good one! *G*) it through the whole scene; first Rayne trying to untangle it, then Garoben, then finally having him just rip it apart.
The dialogue is super, too. Even if this was the only part of the story anyone read, they'd know these two were so close and so at ease with one another.
And I loved how he slowed the pace there at the end. Gotta love a man who is determined to take all night!
Super job!
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Thank you so much! -- debikm, 06:19:16 08/04/10 Wed
>Your writing is always so vivid and immediate, and
>it's things like Rayne's tunic string that make it so.
> I mean, no matter how much you envision your first
>time with someone you want, some little something is
>going to get messed up, and that string getting all
>tangled was so spot-on real it would make anyone
>identify immediately with this scene. I also love the
>way you tied (not a pun, but it would've been a good
>one! *G*) it through the whole scene; first Rayne
>trying to untangle it, then Garoben, then finally
>having him just rip it apart.
This is a major rewrite from the first time I jotted it down. It was pretty much a snore. I had to tell myself 'These are real people, and real things happen to them.' Rayne tends to trip over herself anyway.
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>The dialogue is super, too. Even if this was the only
>part of the story anyone read, they'd know these two
>were so close and so at ease with one another.
They've had months to get to know one another, with both of them dancing around their attraction for each other the whole time. It's been a long road up to this moment.
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>And I loved how he slowed the pace there at the end.
>Gotta love a man who is determined to take all night!
That's my boy!!
I'm so glad you liked it. I may post another, quite different love scene between them, or maybe re-ppost the one with Keresh and Morag...*VBEG*
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>Super job!
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Awwww >>> -- Myxtress, 15:42:42 08/09/10 Mon
Well, it's not Keresh, but then you know me...;-)
Okay
First off, gotta love that they never made it to her room. I don't know why, but I always prefer that it's the man's room. Anyway, the distraction of the string was a nice touch, and I loved how he tensed up and ripped the damn thing. Like the demonstration of contained strength just because it says so much.
And just a FYI? He might have shown her not to be impatient, but he never suceeded with me. Where's the rest of it?????
Hugs
Esther
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Sorry Esther, I did a fade to black on this one... -- debikm, 18:35:41 08/09/10 Mon
>Well, it's not Keresh, but then you know me...;-)
I know. He is quite the dangerous type, isn't he? But Garoben's not a total goody-two-shoes!
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>Okay
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>First off, gotta love that they never made it to her
>room. I don't know why, but I always prefer that it's
>the man's room. Anyway, the distraction of the string
>was a nice touch, and I loved how he tensed up and
>ripped the damn thing. Like the demonstration of
>contained strength just because it says so much.
Thanks!
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>And just a FYI? He might have shown her not to be
>impatient, but he never suceeded with me. Where's the
>rest of it?????
::scene ends:: Sorry!!!
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>Hugs
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>Esther
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now that's a fine man >>> -- Fi, 16:40:08 08/09/10 Mon
A lovely sense of intimacy - and your ear for dialogue is, as always, spot on. I love how it ends. Oh yes, a lover with a slow hand....
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Thank you FI!! -- debikm, 18:44:33 08/09/10 Mon
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