so, here I go. it is a short piece again, and I would love som crit if you have time to spare. The inspiration came form this pic http://www.ravelry.com/projects/janukke/orange (not sure it will open for not registered users though, depends on the settings of the designer) The contest was to find some words, preferably poetic, to match the first pic. -- Ladies of Lallybroch Literary Forum

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Date Posted: 03:37:24 04/08/14 Tue
Author: Lady Morilka
Subject: so, here I go. it is a short piece again, and I would love som crit if you have time to spare. The inspiration came form this pic http://www.ravelry.com/projects/janukke/orange (not sure it will open for not registered users though, depends on the settings of the designer) The contest was to find some words, preferably poetic, to match the first pic.

Secrets (copyright by me, postetd for critic purpose only, does not constitute publication)

When orange blossoms fly
my thoughts are free to touch the sky.
Not bound by road or men
only I know where they went.

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[> Hey Lady M! I couldn't see the pic so these are just my impressions as I read, K? >>> -- Myxtress, 11:05:53 04/11/14 Fri

Here goes:

The first line put me in an orchard full of mature trees covered in blossoms, and of course, they are drifting in the air.

Line two made the wind a bit stronger and the blossoms rise higher into the sky.

Line three added a road between the trees, and put a lady in one of those old fashioned, ankle length, white, tied with a sash, dress. Oh and a hat, which she's holding onto so it doesn't blow away.

Line four didn't add anything to the imagery, but I got the secrets she was keeping. And aren't they wonderful!

You know, I must have mentioned before that I don't get poetry. But here I'm just amazed at how much emotion is tied up in those four lines and even more astounded with myself that I allowed my visuals to join the clouds she was looking at and just feel what was inside.

Hmmmm. I'll have to ponder on this some more.

Thanks for sharing!

Hugs

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[> [> You'r good>>> -- Lady Morilka, 15:00:56 04/11/14 Fri

The pic is actually of a woman with a secretive smile hiding in the corners of her mouth.
I woun't give you more details for now as to not disturbe your image, which I love by the way.
And you showed me one thing clear, the emotions got across.
Fenlinka

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[> [> [> Woo hoo! *G* -- Myxtress, 12:54:37 04/13/14 Sun

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