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Date Posted: 15:13:09 04/25/14 Fri
Author: Lady Morilka
Subject: Option 3 (more ore less)
In reply to: Myxtress 's message, "HOMEWORK! for April 13, 2014" on 12:42:18 04/13/14 Sun

Just a short piece (aren't they all?) that came to mind when I was working in the kitchen this morning and my youngest was emptying everything in reach, happiely mumbling to herself.
It still needs a bit of work, but I like the sentiment.
(Posted for critique purpose only, does not constitude publication)

Morning light
who's traveled so far
comes to a rest
on my young ones head,
is mirrored in her eyes,
sparkling an blue.
Good morning new day
to this wonder filled world!

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[> [> I love this! It actually brought a tear to my eye. :) I'm no judge of poetry, but I recognize a word painting when I see it. Lovely. -- JustGina, 20:27:32 04/25/14 Fri

>Just a short piece (aren't they all?) that came to
>mind when I was working in the kitchen this morning
>and my youngest was emptying everything in reach,
>happiely mumbling to herself.
>It still needs a bit of work, but I like the sentiment.
>(Posted for critique purpose only, does not constitude
>publication)
>
>Morning light
>who's traveled so far
>comes to a rest
>on my young ones head,
>is mirrored in her eyes,
>sparkling an blue.
>Good morning new day
>to this wonder filled world!

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[> [> This is beautiful! And such vivid imagery that makes it so easy to see. Thanks for sharing! -- Myxtress, 00:53:50 04/26/14 Sat

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[> [> I think the titel for this is going to be "A moment of peace" -- Lady Morilka, 15:10:02 05/07/14 Wed

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