Date Posted:06:18:50 06/16/10 Wed Author: Debi Subject: I need to be more Zen between dialogue, you're saying..;-) In reply to:
susiej
's message, "Re: In here, Old Dogs scene: 1082 words" on 21:15:09 06/15/10 Tue
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> Great scene overall, Debi. Just those little bits
>that jarred me out of the moment. I was cringing and
>laughing. I can see them all clearly. Love the kid
>clinging to the leg. You do kids so well.
Thanks susiej! I never 'see' those qualifiers until someone points them out. I always start out telling, not showing. I appreciate you reminding me/kicking me in the pants!
Debi
I used to be the absolute worst ever at describing every emotion. One of the many reasons my word count was so big.
Now, I think it's became, for me, like Ester and her adverbs. No offense Ester! Because I agree; however, the occasional adverb or emotional description can add zing or depth. Like that chuckle- chuckle usually means amused, but amusement may not come from what the reader thinks. In your case it was- oh, if you only knew how I'm about to bite your head off.
