Date Posted:10:52:17 03/29/10 Mon Author: Esther Subject: A little late Fel, but I made it. This way please >>> In reply to:
Fel
's message, "Line Please response>>>>>" on 16:49:16 03/15/10 Mon
Well, for the purpose intended, I like it. It showed us why he idolized his brother. I think its a good start to get us to see that he is aware that all isn't what it should be and therefore, he's more open to us as a character who has to make some hard choices. I'd like to have more flesh on those bones though. Were there any sounds? Even at the distance he was at, could he hear the shot carried over? Screams from the children when they saw their parents shot? Did the sight of them being killed bring up the memory of the scent of blood? Did he question if he would be one of those enlisted with that 'duty'? And I do question where he got the sense that women and children were not supposed to be hurt in the course of war. His upbringing wouldn't suggest this honour. And being on the frontlines with men who thought like his brother would reinforce their thinking that they were superior? And, yes, I'm rambling, but wouldn't it harden him to the value of life when he took so much of it during those three years?
