Date Posted:19:13:02 04/12/10 Mon Author: Alex Subject: Re: In here>>> In reply to:
Fi
's message, "In here>>>" on 09:41:43 04/08/10 Thu
>The sky
>was clear, but the river swelled from last night's
>rain.
This line made me pause. Missing a had? Or the river was swollen? I'd suggest adding in the scents of the salmon to the scene and I felt bad she threw the fish guts at the cat. Maybe she tossed them onto the floor for him? Other than that I enjoyed Richard's boyish actions and thoughts balanced against his words of being grown up and ready. And Kate's thriftiness showing how tight things are for the family. Nicely done!
