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Date Posted: 22:49:44 07/30/01 Mon
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codename: Tabitha
's message, "Housekeeping" on 22:25:50 07/29/01 Sun
I appreciate your comments. I am always receptive to constructive criticism, how else dose a writer improve? I feel you have misunderstood the nature of this fan fiction. It was meant to be a frivolous story. I wanted to show a lighter side of Section.
I was sitting there thinking that there are no stories about the infamous House Keeping operatives. This story was written solely for fun. I thought the blatant disregard of the fandom rules and the obvious Mary Sue character would bring this point across. Yes I had read that article before I wrote this story, just hours before in fact. Perhaps that added to the late night or early morning hours and allergy medication had a hand in this story? I don’t know.
However let me address some incorrect observations you made about the character of Riva. She is Madeline and Operations friend yes, but I never stated she was a best friend of Paul’s. She cannot and never claimed to run Com better then Birkoff. She was never even trying to run Com. Riva was a member of housekeeping. Since she was in early and Section was in a jam, Birkoff briefed her, on the missions slated to go out. Her task was to help MADELINE get those operatives suited up to go out, which she did. She NEVER suggested security Systems to Michael, he asked HER to have it installed.
As for the use of Paul without previous background information…. When did the show EVER give us explanations of the characters actions until after the fact? In that sense I do think the move was in keeping with the show. Justifying Riva’s thought that he was harmless is the fact that it was her thoughts. It was NOT a narrative overview of the character. Riva as you stated did know him better then the other operatives and personally I think it is MADELINE that is the more dangerous of the duo. But that is a matter of choice.
Fans tend to call characters by nicknames but don’t best friends as well? Yes it was never done on the show, but then isn’t that the function of fan fiction? Isn’t it to fill in cracks left by the show? In real life there are some nicknames that I would not let anyone but my closest friends call me by. When I write fan fiction I do so attempting to keep in mind that for the duration of the story, these characters are real. And adding something like a friend addressing the character by a nickname is a device I find adds realism to a story.
Don’t let an English teacher hear you advising misuse of the English language for the sake of how it sounds. As mine was found of saying if we cannot speak our own language correctly we had better make a habit of writing it correctly. J I write this as I disregard most of those same rules! LOL. But I do know what you mean. Julia is afraid, as it is established on the first page, of not meeting society’s standards. Her manners aren’t that good, and if there is anyone that could engrain manners into your head its Madeline.
Thanks for pointing out the switching of tenses and the wrong name placements. Those were major goofs on my part.
As for who Julia is. She is a friend like Riva said. She is not a section operative or she would not need to ask who Madeline was now would she? As to if she is an innocent or not, I am leaving that choice to the reader.
There is nothing to support the fact that Madeline and Operations never leave section in my mind. Sure they don’t go on missions but their private lives were never truly expounded on. Here I chose to use some poetic license to say that Madeline has a life outside of Section.
Your right this story is too short to do all the bits and pieces justice, but then so where the episodes. This story was never meant to be a serious story of life in Section. It was just a feel good story. I had thought that breaking all the rules and the warning I posted on this story had brought that across. I will however keep your comments for future reference as I do thrive of observations like these. They help one grow as a writer.
Thank you,
Codename: Tabitha
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