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Date Posted: 04:38:55 10/29/03 Wed
Author: Adalberto Rocha
Subject: story-ending

Vera and classmates,
I was not sure whether I should send the first draft or the revised one of my story-ending. I imagine were supposed to send only the revised one. Still, to be on the safe side, I decided to send BOTH. This is the first, original version. Standby while I wait for Titoīs revision, then Iīll send the revised version as well. Sorry for any inconvenience...
Adalberto Rocha


A Strange Dream

It was getting late, and the kids had to get ready for bed. They were already done with their dinner and had brushed their teeth. They kissed their parents goodnight and curled in their beds under the covers. It was a bit chilly but not too much, but Molly kept herself bundled up so that her little feet wouldn't get cold. After a while, her and her little brother steve were sound asleep. Molly started dreaming of a beautiful green park with lots of big trees and berry bushes. She saw herself walking around with her little brother when she saw a pair of red shiny boots in the bushes. They looked sparkly new and she thought they were just the size of her cold little feet. "These boots will keep my feet warm" she thought, and when she didn't find anyone in the park she figured that they don't belong to anyone. Molly tried the boots on and they fit perfectly! Her brother thought they looked beautiful on her. Molly stood up and started walking, but all of a sudden...

things changed quite a bit. She looked at herself and her brother and ran behind a bush. For some reason she felt embarrassed by the fact that she was naked. She also couldnīt look at her brotherīs naked body without blushing...Whatīs happening to me? Why do I see things so differently? Then for a moment she felt very alone. She quickly removed the shoes, but nothing changed, she was different and saw things differently. Then she figured she didnīt want to be alone in this reality. Her brother, who had this puzzled expression all over his face, looked at her in a way that reflected the strange behavior which Molly had displayed. This made her feel even more lonely, then, exercising her first sin, she thought only of herself and not wanting to be lonely, behaved selfishly. She got out of the bush, approached her baffled brother Steve and told him that he too should try on the boots for they were different from any other boots she had worn before and that they had made her feel different somehow. She also said that she would just love it if he tried them on so that he could feel as she felt. Of course, her brother was very reluctant to try them on, after all they were red girl boots. Besides, his sister had behaved so strangely after she tried them on. Still, his sister insisted saying that they were brother and sister, they only had each other, and that if he didnīt try them on she would leave and not play with him anymore. Now, he did not want to be lonely. He wanted to be like his sister. So he took those boots and put them on. Naturally, Steve also knew then how his sister had felt and saw things as his sister had seen. The rest of the story you guys know, right. Weīre all sinners...But anyway, then, a voice from beyond appeared and said, "My children, my children..." Then Molly woke up and realized that her mom was shouting from downstairs, "My children, my children". She glanced at the clock and realized she was quite late for school. She woke her brother up and got out as fast as she could, for that day she had planned to get to school early to play a joke on Mrs. Blacksworth with her friends. She really didnīt want to, but all her friends were going to be involved in it and she didnīt want to be left out, she didnīt want to be different, she didnīt want to be lonely.

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