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Date Posted: 06:45:22 05/22/04 Sat
Author: Ice_Visions
Subject: Testing? Feeback please: Angel writing sample

I’m not sure when this fits into the Angel saga chronologically but I’m not too bothered. I’ll write the preceding episodes at a later date. Please give me feedback on this. I'd appreciate it hugely.

Angel 6x0? Reconciliation

Cemetery –Dusk
The camera moves over the graves of Gunn, Wesley and Cordelia. Illyria, Spike and Angel approach them, Angel is holding flowers. As the three approach and mourn and eventually leave WE HEAR

ANGEL V.O.
I lost a lot of people. Since I started fighting this fight there’s nobody standing here who’s stood with me all the while. They’ve all fallen, died or left. Even I managed to be sent to hell. It’s like being back at the beginning. Having nothing except this constant sense of loss. If you love people and you’re going to live forever, you know there’ll be pain. You know you’ll feel it and you know it can never leave. And I’m sorry. There’s not a person lying in front of me who I didn’t, in some way, kill. I killed my family.

Spike’s place –Night
Illyria, Angel and Spike are sitting. For a while they are very quiet. Someone finally speaks up…

SPIKE
Does anybody remember those sorts of little pizza bagels?

ANGEL
Why?

SPIKE
No reason.

More silence

SPIKE
Well, yeah actually, yeah. There is a bloody reason. Since we made the magic dragon go puff all we’ve done is sit here and feel sorry for ourselves- aren’t we supposed to-

ANGEL
Supposed to what? Go out and fight the fight? What the hell for? Anyone I cared about is dead, we can’t go back to Wolfram and Hart, I can’t- I just can’t do this anymore!

ILLYRIA
What does this have to do with pizza bagels?

SPIKE
Because we’re about as much use fighting evil lately as pizza bagels…or hummus.

ANGEL
This has nothing to do with bagels. This is about nothing, being able to change nothing. Having nothing.

SPIKE
Thank you great overlord of the pretentious statement. We are able to change things, we can fight. Smite badness and so on.

ANGEL
We can’t do that anymore. No more fighting. Not ever.

He leaves

ILLYRIA
He is right. He has no minions to aid him. He has lost his strength.

SPIKE
He’s not lost it; he’s just too much of a pansy to use it.

Hyperion Hotel –Night
Angel enters and looks around; there are dustsheets everywhere. He goes and leans on the reception desk. He moves into what was his office and sits down on the chair. He puts his head in his hands

GUNN V.O
It's about the mission, bro. He's got it

And over to the weapons cabinet

CORDELIA V.O
Oh, and by the way, you’re welcome

On his way upstairs

WESLEY V.O
We know you’re a man with a demon inside- not the other way around

And into his room

FRED V.O
Handsome man saved me from the monsters

He looks out of the window

DOYLE V.O
The good fight, yeah?

There might just be a tear

CCTV –On Angel

We see a dark figure overlooking the image on the screen.

ROBERT V.O.
Is that the one who had Master MacDonald killed sir?

MR. MACDONALD
I believe it is. See to it Robert. I have precious little patience left for vampires, I’d rather not get my hands dirty this time. You know what needs to be done.

Robert nods.

OPENING CREDITS
David Boreanaz as Angel
Amy Acker as Illyria/ Winnifred ‘Fred’ Burkle
Tom Lenk as Andrew Wells
And James Marsters as Spike

Special guest stars

Anthony Stuart Head as Rupert Giles

And

Alexis Denisof as Wesley Wyndham-Pryce

Guest starring

Jenny Mollen and Felicia Day

LA –Night, Spike and Illyria are on patrol. Spike is holding a stake whilst Illyria wields an axe. Illyria is wearing civilian clothes over her mystical garb. She looks stupid.

ILLYRIA
Why must I wear these garments?

SPIKE
Keep you nice and incognito. Red leather and blue highlights aren’t exactly inconspicuous.

ILLYRIA
I could change my form.

SPIKE
No. No more changing.

ILLYRIA
But remind me, why do we do this?

SPIKE
Because it helps, love. Fighting, save a damsel, stake a few vamps. It’s like being a hero for dummies.

ILLYRIA
And that makes you a hero? Killing half-breeds?

SPIKE
More to it than that…

ILLYRIA
Such as?

SPIKE
Doing it for the right reasons.

ILLYRIA
Which are?

SPIKE
You know, you’re quite the little quizmistress tonight. Half a mind to have you host the Weakest Link. You can eviscerate the losers. You can eviscerate me if you want, more interesting than all the questions.

ILLYRIA
What is-

SPIKE
Look! I don’t want to be asked this twaddle by some half-witted yet intelligent big blue demon thing. You want me to explain this world? Fine. But if you want to figure this place out, try living in it.

ILLYRIA
You seem strangely irate.

SPIKE
Yes, irate. Well-flaming-done.

ILLYRIA
Angel is irate too. He pains. I can sense his frustration.

SPIKE
We all can.

ILLYRIA
I find this too makes me angry. All this sitting and waiting, it pains me. It makes me feel empty. I yearn for a release.

SPIKE
You want to take it out on something?

Illyria nods

SPIKE
Try taking out those lovely men behind us with the big foreheads and pointy teeth.

The camera pans out and we see Spike and Illyria are surrounded by vampires.

ILLYRIA
(Quizzically) Why?

Hyperion –Night

Angel walks out from his room. He hears a strange creaking and immediately turns. He walks down the corridor, light plays off him. He turns a corner and progresses further into the dark. He goes into a room which is has the lights turned on. There is a suitcase on the floor and the room looks lived in. Angel pokes his head out and notices the lights are on under the doors for the rooms for the rest of the corridor. He hears a voice from the lobby and turns around. As he approaches the lobby he sees Andrew, Vi and Giles enter. He stays out of sight whilst they talk.

VI
…and I was blown away. I don’t think I’ve seen so much mucus from such a small Groxlar before.

GILES
I agree. It was unprecedented. I’m rather glad I packed an overnight bag.

ANDREW
I could lend you a shirt, it’s got Marshie on it.

GILES
Thank you for the extreme hospitality but that won’t be necessary. I have some perfectly nice outfits that aren’t covered in moronic carton characters.

VI
But Marshie’s cute. He’s all puffity and fluffity.

GILES
Oh not you too.

ANDREW
You just can’t stand being the odd one out here.

GILES
No, however I can stand being the sane one out.

ANDREW
What’s that supposed to mean? Do you not like cute things?

GILES
Well, I just find it hard to understand an attachment to a fictional character, and a talking marshmallow at that.

ANDREW
Again, I ask you what’s that supposed to mean.

GILES
It means what it sounds like you little hobbit.

ANDREW
Jonathan Creek on crack!

VI
Can you two just not calm down, this is the sevent-

ANDREW
Yeah, well maybe when he backs down and gives me space.

GILES
Fine, if you want space there are several exciting void dimension I can send you to-

ANDREW
Oh you would not!

Angel jumps down in front of them from the landing, coat billowing. He looks damn cool.

ANGEL
There will be no shouting in my hotel. I’m going to ask you some questions and you’d better think fast cos if you don’t-

ANDREW
Vi, the vampyr slayer here, will kill you.

VI
(waves) Hi.

ANDREW
Look, what are you doing here Angel?

ANGEL
I don’t need a reason. This is my hotel. I’ve been away a while but I had planned on moving back in.

GILES
May I ask why?

ANGEL
Cosier than Spike’s basement.

GILES
No. Why do you think this is your hotel?

ANGEL
Because I own it.

ANDREW
Uh, no. I do (holds up lease). See?

ANGEL
Oh.

LA street –Night. Spike and Illyria are still fighting vamps.

SPIKE
(Hits a vamp) You like that? (he gets hit back) No, didn’t expect you would.

After some fighting Spike hits one in the face. He gets knocked out from behind. All twelve vamps turn to face Illyria.

ILLYRIA
You wish to challenge me?

LEAD VAMP
No. We want to kill you and suck your blood out.

ILLYRIA
You wouldn’t like it. The last vampire who tried said it tasted of acid. It hurt her tongue, before I ate it.

LEAD VAMP
Really ,you taste bad? I’ve not heard that one before (mimics) ‘Mister, don’t eat me! I taste bad’. You’re as good as dead.

ILLYRIA
Please try. It may amuse me, albeit briefly.

HENCHMAN VAMP
Cocky?

ILLYRIA
No, correct.

The vamps rush Illyria. She goes utterly Uma on them, swinging her battleaxe, slicing and dicing with maximum effect. She may even be smiling. The lead vamp looks at her in awe.

LEAD VAMP
What are you?

ILLYRIA
Just a shell.

The lead vamp runs off. A flying stake hits him in the back and he dusts. Spike gets up.

SPIKE
Did you see the arm on that? I really showed him. (Off Illyria’s look) Yeah, well done team.

ILLYRIA
We are not a team. I lead you.

SPIKE
Hang on a sec…

ILLYRIA
I am the stronger warrior.

SPIKE
Yes but…

ILLYRIA
Does that not make me qualified to lead?

SPIKE
Angel’s strong. He’s not the best leader in the world. Look, let’s go back to mine. I’ll get us some ice-cream and rent a film.

ILLYRIA
I would like that. I find it mesmerising. The chocolate fish in the frozen milk, they cannot swim.

SPIKE
Slaughter followed by poetic analysis of Ben and Jerry’s. What sort of hell dimension do you come from?

Hyperion Lobby -Night

ANGEL
This is your hotel?

ANDREW
Yes. Do you like it? I thought we could get some antique white stone for here, go all Minas Tirith or have like a DS9 theme video room.

VI
With like a big plasma screen?

ANDREW
And little diodes all down the left side.

ANGEL
There is going to be no redecoration…a plasma screen?

ANDREW
With diodes.

ANGEL
Giles, can you just tell me what is going on here?

GILES
I assumed you knew.

ANGEL
Well if I did would I have just asked you ‘Giles can you tell me what is going on here’?

GILES
No, I don’t suppose you would. Andrew, Vi, could you give me a moment. I need to speak to Angel alone.

VI
Yeah, I’ll go and get the mucus out.

ANDREW
Giles…

GILES
Go before I start saying how much I hate Babylon 5 again.

ANDREW
You wouldn’t.

GILES/ANGEL
Just go.

Andrew and Vi leave.

GILES
You may want to sit down.

ANGEL
No, I’m fine. I also find myself rather impatient. What.Is.Going.On?

GILES
This hotel has been purchased by the council. The aim is to set up an American base by which we have access to anything nasty crawling out of the Sunnydale crater and to recruit and train slayers on the East Coast.

ANGEL
And?

GILES
And we can keep an eye on you.

ANGEL
An eye on…was this Buffy’s idea?

GILES
No, Xander’s actually. (Angel sighs) He has a point however. I was made aware recently of your dealings with the Black Thorn group.

ANGEL
I killed the Black Thorn group. I lost two of my best stopping them.

GILES
I’m sorry to say that whatever the circumstances may be you have a bad record when it comes to being good. You slaughtered a roomful of lawyers-

ANGEL
Evil lawyers.

GILES
Nearly sucked the world into hell-

ANGEL
I was Angelus then.

GILES
Tore a hole in reality.

ANGEL
For my son.

GILES
Killed a higher power.

ANGEL
She ate people.

GILES
And you murdered Jenny.

Silence. Angel has absolutely no comeback.

GILES
Are we quite done?

ANGEL
Yes.

GILES
Then if you’d be so kind as to get out of my establishment.

Angel turns to leave. He walks towards the door and sees Wesley standing there, bloodied and dead, his mortal wound seeps slightly.

WESLEY
Hello, how are things? You bastard.

Angel looks at him in amazement, he has gone colder than dead.

GILES
Angel, are you alright?

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