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] Date Posted: 02:25:34 01/24/08 Thu Melted I held you in my hand Suddenly You were no longer there It was like you had melted So confused I can no longer understand I’m looking at an empty hand Can’t you see I’m falling? Can’t you see I’m falling? I can see you You don’t say a word I can hear your heart calling Your head does the ruling Maybe It’s just me I’m fooling Trying to explain Time and time again Doesn’t make it easier Numbs this pain I would never want to break you I’ve broken me Here’s a piece Tiny piece of me This tiny piece of me That was in my hand This tiny piece So quickly melted So you see The only hand I can offer Is empty Will I love you do? DSL [ Next Thread | Previous Thread | Next Message | Previous Message ] |
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Author: Paul [ Edit | View ] |
Date Posted: 03:16:59 01/24/08 Thu Mark, Cracking piece, slick and fast moving. I love the idea of giving a bit of yourself, yet not being able to hold onto it! Diamond poetry my friend, Peace, Paul. [ Post a Reply to This Message ] |
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Author: Arunansu [ Edit | View ] |
Date Posted: 04:56:42 01/24/08 Thu Great write, DSL. Very very emotional. Cheers. [ Post a Reply to This Message ] |
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Author: Mireille [ Edit | View ] |
Date Posted: 13:10:45 01/24/08 Thu You moved me much DSL.. like I'd love I write these lines, I can so relate to this disappearance. Thank you. [ Post a Reply to This Message ] |
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Author: Sasha [ Edit | View ] |
Date Posted: 17:35:41 01/24/08 Thu "Will I love you do?" ~ awwww...that last line really did it for me a really enjoyable piece of poetry with a wonderful closing... *hugs* Sash xx  . [ Post a Reply to This Message ] |
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Author: AnneMarie [ Edit | View ] |
Date Posted: 07:58:25 01/26/08 Sat "Can’t you see I’m falling? Can’t you see I’m falling? I can see you You don’t say a word I can hear your heart calling Your head does the ruling Maybe It’s just me I’m fooling" Wow! This is a wonderful piece for sure..congrats.... "Will I love you do?" The ending leaves me speechless and very touched...hook, line and sank me here with this. Great job~ Hugs, AnneMarie [ Post a Reply to This Message ] |