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Date Posted: 00:26:32 09/24/02 Tue
Author: Sonali
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Well, I must say those were quite the revisions....
In reply to: Z 's message, "RevisedChapter 1 of my *Untitled* story....with more added as well...." on 22:14:31 09/23/02 Mon

I applaud the effort! As if your original wasn't good enough, you went and improved it. I like how you added more flashbacks between hanna and justin. And for some reason, I really liked how you added that little part of her in class, about how she looked at the chalkboard full of notes and her notebook empty - maybe because I relate all too well to that situation...hehe. I can tell you're really taking your time with this story, doting on every detail which is very good (not to sound like a teacher...lol) I'm anxious to see how relationships start to form between hanna and the boys (if any at all). Oh and if you ever post an unsatisfactory chapter again, I shall banish you from the board. (note sarcasm, please) Seriously, though, you really should watch out for those misspelled words. (see previous note about sarcasm)

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