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Date Posted: 14:59:27 01/21/02 Mon
Author: Elendal
Subject: The Champions of the Light

Okay, I guess I will try this. This is a short story that I am working on... and I would love some advice, especially on character development. Anyway here it goes:

Prolouge:

The Void ruled all with its all-powerful and encompassing hand. It filled space and time; wherever there was something living the Void enveloped it, whenever life was found the Void added it to itself. The Void was the only power in the universe, one that nothing would ever challenge, or so it thought. But fate decrees nothing may remain unchallenged forever, and so, as fate ordained, the Life Stream came to challenge the Void.
The Life Stream was borne out of a part of the Voids consciousness. Part of the Void regretted the pure evil that it was, regretted all that it had done to the universe. Then, at the beginning of time as we know it, the regrets became strong enough that they broke free from the Void in a valiant effort of denial and took upon the name of the Life Stream. Free from it oppressor the Void, the Life Stream was left to act by itself.
At the moment the Life Stream broke free, the Void realized its mistake. The Void cursed itself, and set off after the Life Stream. The Void would destroy it with its all-encompassing hand and once again make it a part of itself.
Long the chase was. The Life Stream, using it small size as an advantage raced across the universe, the Void quick in pursuit. To challenge and slow the Void, the Life Stream gave up parts of itself to create new and wonderful worlds, each with a different inhabitant.
Still the Void did not give up; it continued its pursuit; the only thoughts it had were of hatred and vengeance. It swallowed up the worlds left by the Life Stream and once again added them to its immense being.
Finally, in despair, The Life Stream sent forth to do one final task, a task that might save it from the Void. The task was a world, where not only one race ruled, but also all the races that had ever been created by the Life Stream. The world would be called Cromina, and the Life Stream would raise shields of Magik so that the Void could not directly influence the world. Cromina was the Life Streams greatest and last creation. It was the Life Streams last hope of survival.
The Life Stream set to work immediately. It made mountains and plains. It put life where before there was none, but for each part of the world that was created the Life Stream gave up a part of itself, for that is the required price of creation.
From the Life Streams inner being the Four Ancient Races were created: Elves, Dwarves, Men, and Faeries. Each race had been made to be a caretaker or something, to prepare the world for the coming of the Void.
The Elves were created to be the watchers and users of magic. They would excel in the mystical arts, the power to create minor things and the power to destroy. It was them the world would look to when in utter chaos. It was the Elves who the other raced would look to for guidance. It was the Elves, who in the end, would be the rulers of the world Cromina.
The Dwarves were the miners and weapon makers. Fold would flow out of their mines like water, and silver like air. Weapons and Armor would be praised from around the world if it bore the symbol of the hammer and anvil of the Dwarves. The Dwarves were the Warriors of Life the short minded but charming race.
The Men were to be the Caretakers of Horses. They would rule the plains, raising the best horses in all the land. Their horses would be revered throughout the land; they would be the mighty horses of the cavaliers. The Men would be the Riders.
Last, the Faeries were created. These creatures were the smallest of the Four Races, each not bigger than the size of a human thumb, and yet from these small beings the knowledge of plants, trees, and animals. From this small race the druids would spring.
With its creation complete, the Life Stream departed, setting up barriers that would shield Cromina from the Void and the Life Stream. Its creation complete the Life Stream lefts, once again fleeing the Void. But one day it would return to its mean of survival.

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