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] Date Posted: 19:12:27 02/12/04 Thu In reply to: Angela McCarver 's message, "Bitter Feelings Gave Me the Ability To Write" on 10:53:31 12/05/02 Thu i was invited to this site by a freind (Ted Watkins) he wanted to know my opion on some of the work, one being your piece. if you dont mind, i have a couple thoughts on this poem... 1. congrats you are one of the few who can write more then 3 STANZA'S!!! why do people feel the need to stop after filling half a page? 2. you keep a constant ryhme scheme for most of the poem, that is always good, a lot of people stopped doing that too, grrrr...but you did a good job! 3. one phrase that comes up every time some one post a poem like this at Teds site (voypoet.hopto.org, i will plug it if ted doesnt!) is how sad it is that it takes a hell to bring out heaven in us. we go threw hell but when we put it in paper, others see a heaven in it...and this is a heavenly piece of lit. not the body obvivously, it is dpressing, but the scheme, word usage, patterns, they are all there, and diverse. some even reaccuring...awesome stuff. well i am sure ted will follow up and corect my, he never lets me represent him with out him protecting his honor (if there such a thing) [ Next Thread | Previous Thread | Next Message | Previous Message ] |
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Date Posted: 19:13:32 02/12/04 Thu i was invited to this site by a freind (Ted Watkins) he wanted to know my opion on some of the work, one being your piece. if you dont mind, i have a couple thoughts on this poem... 1. congrats you are one of the few who can write more then 3 STANZA'S!!! why do people feel the need to stop after filling half a page? 2. you keep a constant ryhme scheme for most of the poem, that is always good, a lot of people stopped doing that too, grrrr...but you did a good job! 3. one phrase that comes up every time some one post a poem like this at Teds site (voypoet.hopto.org, i will plug it if ted doesnt!) is how sad it is that it takes a hell to bring out heaven in us. we go threw hell but when we put it in paper, others see a heaven in it...and this is a heavenly piece of lit. not the body obvivously, it is dpressing, but the scheme, word usage, patterns, they are all there, and diverse. some even reaccuring...awesome stuff. well i am sure ted will follow up and corect my, he never lets me represent him with out him protecting his honor (if there such a thing) [ Post a Reply to This Message ] |