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Date Posted: 23:34:26 07/02/02 Tue
Author: Glory er, Harley Quinn
Subject: Hold on a minute! I don't have my chapter 4 review finished!
In reply to: UHC 's message, "Bonded (Chapter 5)" on 22:53:26 07/02/02 Tue

Shit! A mermaid gets busy for a couple of days and look what happens.

Thanks, by the way, for letting us know how many chapters total.

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[> Bonded (Chapter 5) Review -- Harley Quinn, 00:24:26 07/04/02 Thu [1]

Nice scenes with Buffy and Xander working on the house and going shopping. I especially like when Xander had this to say about Anya: "Anya is very serious about being human, she read dozens of cookbooks and served meals that would kill a goat but eventually she got better. She's like that, practice until perfect." That's Anya all right. And it sounded very believable coming out of Xander's mouth.

What I thought was kind of weird, though, was how Xander was saying that he loved Anya but a short time later he's flirting with Buffy in a way that's really strange for someone who thinks he's in love. maybe that's the point you're trying to make, and I know the whole focus of your story is getting Buffy and Xander together, but this whole exchange between Buffy and Xander didn't seem true to me:

"I just had to be naked didn't I?"

"It's my fantasy so what I say goes. Come on Buffy, let me do something nice for you. If ever there was a girl who deserved a pick-me-up it's you."

I don't know, I just can't see them acting that way. But that could be just me.

Good stuff about the sword people. And kudos to you for doing something that ME has, so far, not been able to do: give Dawn a purpose outside the Glory storyline. Looking forward to the next chapter! :)


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