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Date Posted: 10:41:28 06/23/02 Sun
Author: kalima
Subject: Re: Wieghing In....
In reply to: lanie 's message, "Wieghing In...." on 13:54:38 06/19/02 Wed


>
>But this fic pushed the boundaries in my opinion and
>in regards to an accurate portrayal of the characters
>in season six I had to disagree on some points.
>
>Maybe it was the language or perhaps the characters
>thoughts that made me think of parts of this as being
>vulgar-which is quite a word choice to begin with.
>
>It's not that its a bad piece. It isn't.
>lanie

I had a mixed reaction to this as well. I thought the sex was hot, and, considering the situation, not out of character. The internal dialog (in fact Spike calling attention to her internal monologue was very funny) didn't seem out of character for me because of Buffy's state of mind (I couldn't imagine her initiating sex with Spike unless she was very messed up and confused and unhappy and really, REALLY angry at life.) What bothered me about this fic was purely technical. Abrupt switching of POV's within the same paragraph. It's a mistake that inexperienced writers often make and was doubly jarring to me because the author showed a lot of skill in other ways.

If anything will make me crazy it's the lack of tight control with point of view shifts.

Also read something recently (and can't remember the title) where I was taken abruptly out of the scene by a reference to the pain of circumcision (Spike) when I feel quite certain this is not something an English lad born in the 1850's would have experienced. The American actor maybe, but...

I know it seems silly, but it completely threw me.

Kalima

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