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Date Posted: 16:06:48 03/11/03 Tue
Author: Kelso
Author Host/IP: c66.190.39.48.fdl.wi.charter.com / 66.190.39.48
Subject: Re: Is it too early to start discussion? (RE: "Love is Blind" by Avalon)
In reply to: PJzallday 's message, "Is it too early to start discussion? (RE: "Love is Blind" by Avalon)" on 15:48:21 03/07/03 Fri

B/S is one of my favorite pairings, and "Love is Blind" is a really good example of it. Not great, but very good.

The prologue was an excellent attention-grabber. Points for that. The story kept my attention throughout, although in a couple places well into it I did find myself getting a little impatient with the pace. I liked the characterization very much (particularly Spike's), and the dialogue was convincing. Buffy didn't immediately accept that Spike had changed--good again. And the Buffy/Giles scene was a nice touch. The Riley issue was at least mentioned a few times, in a non-bashing way, instead of being ignored. Finally, the ending worked for me.

What didn't I like?
-The niggling grammar/punctuation errors. I found an average of 1-2 errors per page, and the story was 74 printed pages. (Almost always little things like the omitted comma in the phrase "It wasn't from fear[MISSING COMMA] though.") Those mistakes, while relatively minor, really added up, and I have to make a deduction for them.
-The geography conflict others have mentioned.
-Buffy's blindness was a relatively fresh idea; Spike undergoing the same trials as Angel was not.
-In the second half, the story dragged a bit in a few places.

As for a number rating, I didn't quite want to put this story in the "excellent" category so I have to give it an 89.

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[> [> Minor change -- Kelso, 19:44:11 03/11/03 Tue (c66.190.39.48.fdl.wi.charter.com/66.190.39.48)

I was looking at the story one more time for something else, and I ran across an explanation of the trial's location. It moves around and finds those who are looking for it. Since I noted the geography as a flaw before and it actually isn't, I'm upping my rating of this story just a bit, to a 90.


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