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Date Posted: 16:19:07 09/21/02 Sat
Author: persephone
Author Host/IP: blhg335ty8sk.bc.hsia.telus.net / 66.183.197.50
Subject: Re: DISCUSSION: Stormy Night by eretria
In reply to: KatLurkin 's message, "DISCUSSION: Stormy Night by eretria" on 22:54:34 09/17/02 Tue

The characters have no substance. I don't recognize them.

The plot was rather trite. An upset Xander sees Willow in a state of undress - by candlelight, no less - and suddenly realizes what he has been missing. The sex was confusing. It is possible to write wonderful sex scenes with a minumum of words and no mention of nc-17 rated body parts, but this one just left me going "huh?"

The occasional switches over to Xander's POV in a mostly Willow's POV story are rather disconcerting, and while I may not be the best with grammar, this story left me longing for my red pencil to correct all the misplaced commas.

Not only did the story not keep my interest, it never even captured it.

There's nothing really bad about this story, but there isn't anything good about it either. It lacks zing. I give it 50/100.

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[> Re: DISCUSSION: Stormy Night by eretria -- Ozmandayus, 14:56:32 09/22/02 Sun (cache-rk06.proxy.aol.com/152.163.189.70)

I didn't think it was bad at all. Kinda short and sweet. The W/X'r in me smiled a bit.

I give it a 81


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