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Date Posted: 13:49:55 07/24/03 Thu
Author: Raphaela
Author Host/IP: webcacheB05a.cache.pol.co.uk / 195.92.168.167
Subject: Re: I don't get it
In reply to: Incriminating Eloquence 's message, "I don't get it" on 16:17:34 07/22/03 Tue

Good to see you again Eli. This poem certainly had a haunting feel and a sense of foreboding. I liked the way the poem's imagery escalates. Personally I think it would be stronger without the last two lines.

Hope to see more from you.

R


>A whisper in the darkness
>A light call
>warning of dangers soon to come
>
>A messenger from an unseen world
>We turn a blind eye
>We hear, but ignore
>And deep inside us stirs the universal fear
>
>We know what comes
>But always we hope it will not
>We hope that somehow the evil will not reach us
>Perhaps it will be carried away
>Borne by a blessed current of grace
>
>But it comes
>seeping through the fabric
>Spreading
>Hunting
>And when it strikes
>All we can do is breathe shallowly
>Constrained by social laws of conduct
>When our bodies scream to run
>And seek the one responsible
>So that we can advise him on his diet
>And ask him to please do it outside next time
>
>
>eli

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