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Date Posted: 09:07:05 07/08/02 Mon
Author: Raphaela
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Subject: Re: Does She Complain
In reply to: Gemini 's message, "Re: Does She Complain" on 05:22:56 07/08/02 Mon

Gemini

You have articulated far better what I was trying to express - so I can only say I whole-heartedly agree with what you say. I think this in particular sums it up 'But it's the ability to read it as others will and learn from our faults'. I sometimes pass over my more serious, longer poems to writer friends for their honest opinion - often they will send it back saying 'it has potential but not quite right' - and they had been my thoughts but couldn't put my finger on it. Sometimes, another person can suggest an amendment, a different way of expressing something or point out that the meter is out etc. I will then try to look at it again with fresh eyes.

I do want Unicorn to remain a serious Poetry & Short Story Forum - where comments are supportive, but give advice not just flatter the writer. That is the only way we improve our craft. It is our choice whether or not we accept the advice. However, I for one, always appreciate it when somebody has not only taken the time to read my work, but also either offered suggestions for improvement or simply advised me that they do not think it reads well.

I also echo your sentiments:

'I hope this doesn't put you off posting on Unicorn as I for one look forward to your poetry.
I also hope this doesn't put Al off from critiquing properly and not just saying how good everything is.'

Harmony is a valued contributor to Unicorn and I have enjoyed reading such varied poetry.

I also value and respect Al as one of Unicorn's Moderators and am deeply grateful for the time and effort he puts into reading and commenting on the poems posted here. He is an excellent and respected poet. Sometimes he, as I obviously am doing now!, may ramble a bit in the comments - but if critiques are not required then it may be easier to put that next to the title.

Raphaela

p.s. sorry for rambling ;)

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