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Subject: OK.... Author: Songwind [ Next Thread | Previous Thread | Next Message | Previous Message ] Date Posted: 20:44:35 06/11/07 Mon Alright guys. I've finished up to here, and I've got some tips for you! Mossyra: Make sure you double check spellings, and quote usages. Some of your quotes were left open, and some where used in the wrong places. Punctuation is big too! Basically, Just make sure you check your work! It was very good. Cuoha: Some of your details were not needed, while you left a few things out. Like when you took and extract from Lycian's writings, you need to explain she's on a ship. It makes things easier for the reader! I like the idea of your story, but mistreated younger brothers and mistreated daughters is very popular, try and think of something completley different for your next story! Otherwise it was very fun to read! Stoakly: Some of the poems had weird usages of words in them. My suggestion to try would be to first write on paper what you want to say, but don't think about rhyming. If your describing something, describe it clearly. Then break out your thesaurus and find words that mean the same but make sense and rhyme! Conder: I like the story, its very interesting! Like I said to Mossrya, make sure you check your work! Hermes: Cute! [ Next Thread | Previous Thread | Next Message | Previous Message ]