It feels so good to see activity on this board. Thank you for posting!
And sharing with us, and especially me so I can read it.
You might not be super excited about it but I am. You had me by the end of the second sentence. And then you left me hanging. I have a love/hate relationship with those cause I just want to know what the deal here is, ya know? But I guess I'll settle with telling you I loved your voice in this one. I liked how you showed how hot the reporter was without telling me he was hot. Beth's personality was clear and...yup I'm hooked.
Okay. This is the start of many such posts. Can't wait to read the next one.
But just a suggestion, I would like to have a bit more "back and forth", can't name it better, but I mean that with the things distracting him (Beth i.e.) I would love to have him glance back in between and make some of the observations that you wrote prior or after. Like she is interrupting him even more. Do you get what I mean? Not sure I could put it in proper words.
I am waiting for that story to evolve ;)
Myxtress