Ewwww.....! I can see the scene and I think I'm nerly as repulsed as Katie! Way to create an image!
And the whole situation with Adam... well. I can totally see him seeking comfort in Katie, needing to be proven worthy of some sort of affection. But that's the wrong way to go about it. With Katie, I'm surprised she didn't exit the room with his testicles in her hand.
I'm so glad Katie came to your rescue. I need to see who will help me out here shortly.
I know sometimes posting a HW and having limited response is discouraging, but man! They do help me out. Even if I don't do the assignment. They get me thinking, and more times than not something comes out of it, one way or another.
I'd been very, very depressed about Carey On since I whittled it down to 128,000 words. It just wasn't right and it killed me to know it was just sitting there slowly bleeding to death. I was doubting my abilities, seething over the word count and...well, frankly, had just about given up. And here came this HW. And Katie popped up.
After I wrote this, I opened my CO file and took a long, hard look at it. And I decided not to let it die. I love that story and those characters, dammit, and I'd dedicated almost two years of my life to that book. Damned if I'd let the current publishing situation kill it! So since I wrote this bit I've been rewriting the book. Yes, I'm still cutting words and scenes, but I'm doing it without letting it affect the story. I'm combining certain things which cuts out words, but still lets the story move forward. And with those words cut, I have a bit more leeway to flesh out certain bits of the book I felt from the beginning were rushed.
So Carey On still lives. And it all came from a HW.
Bless you.
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P.S. Yep, Katie was a little too shocked to leave Adam's room with his testicles gripped in her fist, but we can't count out Jay. Heehee.
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