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] Date Posted: 14/01/07 15:13 Right Garden friends, i have never written any poetry, i wouldn't even know how to go about it. Yesterday i got a DVD called BARAKA its a film by Ron Fricke & Mark Magidson, i was really moved by this film and after watching it felt i had to write the words down that were in my head. The only reason im sending this in is because i know you won't laugh at me and i know i will get feedback from y'all. LOOK. Open your eyes and be aware your gods are with you everywhere, to give you love not just from above but also here right on the ground. So fill your soul with the gifts for free, such lovely things as a tree. Feel the sun upon your skin and bathe in the moon when the night comes in. All these earthly gems are here and if we love them we will never fear. Love your planet....dammit. Light. The light is in us, that's what we are. Beings of light as bright as a star. Tell me what you think. I have never written anything like this before. Big hugs and bright blessings, love heather. xxxxx [ Next Thread | Previous Thread | Next Message | Previous Message ] |
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Author: whitewolf [ Edit | View ] |
Date Posted: 14/01/07 16:03 Well I think... you should write more poetry! :) I particularly liked the 'Light' one, and in 'LOOK' the wording "Feel the sun upon your skin and bathe in the moon when the night comes in." triggered some lovely imagery. Please, write more. May I place them in the GG Library? [ Post a Reply to This Message ] |
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Author: paganwolf [ Edit | View ] |
Date Posted: 14/01/07 16:19 Nothing wrong with that. besides. poetry and song writing in my case develops with time. What you wrote is beautiful. more? [ Post a Reply to This Message ] |
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Author: heather [ Edit | View ] |
Date Posted: 14/01/07 17:36 Oh thank you for such kind words, i feel like i would like to write more, yes whitewolf i would love it if you put them in the library.....i would feel honored. Does poetry have to rhyme all the time? Hugs bb love heather.xxxxx [ Post a Reply to This Message ] |
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Author: Wolfsdream [ Edit | View ] |
Date Posted: 14/01/07 17:44 Print those out in a nice script and put them up somewhere you can see them Heather and be proud of them....because they are good, really good. As paganwolf said...they are beautiful and I look forward to reading more. Wolfsdream. [ Post a Reply to This Message ] |
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Author: sam spaniel [ Edit | View ] |
Date Posted: 14/01/07 18:13 amazing words heather... such beautiful scripture. to have such inspitation you should feel so proud of yourself... give your self a huge pat on the back honey, love sam x [ Post a Reply to This Message ] |
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Author: jade [ Edit | View ] |
Date Posted: 14/01/07 18:23 I think they were great and agree you should write more. Besides you wrote poetry for yourself, not for others to say its good or it isnt. Although we all like it when someone says something we have written is nice. at the end of the day if it means something to you, then its great and even better because its special. [ Post a Reply to This Message ] |
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Author: Lilly from the Valley [ Edit | View ] |
Date Posted: 15/01/07 8:59 Completely agree with everyone Heather - your words are lovely and the bathing in the moon bit, as WW says, really does conjur up some lovely imagery. Keep writing hun - I want to hear more. LIL [ Post a Reply to This Message ] |
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Author: sweetsong [ Edit | View ] |
Date Posted: 15/01/07 14:12 VERY VERY good. thanks heather. [ Post a Reply to This Message ] |
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Author: whitewolf [ Edit | View ] |
Date Posted: 15/01/07 15:47 "Does poetry have to rhyme all the time?" Absolutely not! :) [ Post a Reply to This Message ] |
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Author: zenwind [ Edit | View ] |
Date Posted: 15/01/07 20:27 Very sweet indeed :) Thank you for writing it, sharing it and transporting me to new places with it.... /\ [ Post a Reply to This Message ] |
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Author: Pilgrim [ Edit | View ] |
Date Posted: 16/01/07 16:01 Very nice poems indeed. Thank you. Does poetry have to rhyme? No, just ask my neice who's fourth grade class had to enter the state poetry competition as an assignment. When my neice handed in her poem the teacher ridiculed her in front of the whole class because "It didn't even rhyme!" She really did embarass my neice. (Poor child) The teacher went on and on about how she didn't even know why she should send it in to the competition. "It isn't even a poem." The teacher ate her words (and I hope she choked on them) when that poem won first place in the state competition. So even if someone who supposedly knows something about poetry doesn't like your poem. Don't pay any attention to them. If you like it, it's good. I would love to see more of your work. :-) [ Post a Reply to This Message ] |
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Author: whitewolf [ Edit | View ] |
Date Posted: 16/01/07 17:09 grrr, teachers like that shouldn't be allowed to teach! but so pleased she had to eat her words in the end! Congratulations to your niece, and a big 'thumbs up' to her from Blackhawk :) Now we all want to read her poem!! [ Post a Reply to This Message ] |
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Author: Wolfsdream [ Edit | View ] |
Date Posted: 16/01/07 18:04 I totally agree with you Whitewolf about that teacher. Any teacher who treats a child this way should be dismissed or sent to be re-trained. And very well done to your neice Pilgrim. [ Post a Reply to This Message ] |
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Author: Pilgrim [ Edit | View ] |
Date Posted: 16/01/07 20:07 I'll see if I can dig up a copy. This was many moons ago. [ Post a Reply to This Message ] |