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| Subject: The Tropics of Cancer and Capricorn | |
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] Date Posted: 10:58:57 01/02/08 Wed I think after all my slicing I can no longer call this a sestina; How about sestina inspired? ;) The last morning in Costa Rica, and the tropical sun has no more mercy than the one that terrorizes the desert. We’re avoiding goodbye with small talk, (insincerity breeds cancer), slowly freezing the local humidity into your native snow. Watching you leave, my lips are frozen from your kisses. But there was fire in that first kiss. Among the ochres and pinks and semi-tropics of my Charleston home, you caught me under a pink snow of petals falling in waves and drifts in the desert- orange light of gloaming, and where your lips pressed, a cancer of longing grew in me, and when the time came I said goodbye to my beaches. Goodbye to the salty air and humid nights that kiss the skin and the hot, black sky where the constellation of Cancer is illuminated in angels. But among the palmettos and tropical spices dwelt the sense that the sea is a desert, and at the peak of the waves of heat, limpid and sweaty, I was wishing for snow. And you offered me snow. For purification, I thought, to become again pristine, and bye-the-bye I was scoured by your rough arctic winds, and came to understand the tundra is also a desert and the bite of frost is the only kiss the Aurora Borealis have for me. The tropic of my southern heart only festers cancer-like next to your icicle calm. I am a cancer of hurricanes screaming with the voice of angry seas, never disrupting the drifts of your snow. And here I am, raging and freezing, in the wrong hemisphere, lost in your Tropic of Capricorn, my lips primed to form “Good-bye”. But the next kiss is a warmer kiss. Maybe under the surface, the ocean is teeming with life? Even the desert boasts a few flowers. The most deserted wasteland holds tiny sparks of life maybe my Cancer heart could nurture to thrive. With another kiss you promised to take me out of the winter, the ice, the snow, And the northlands flew under us quickly and painlessly, too frigid to whisper goodbye. But though the air is lurid and lush, the core of us is still frozen. There is no heat in this tropic. So no more kisses, no more looking for life in the desert. You did not melt in my Tropic of Cancer, and I was frozen in your Capricorn July snow. All my kisses were poems, and all your kisses were kisses goodbye. [ Next Thread | Previous Thread | Next Message | Previous Message ] |
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Author: Sasha [ Edit | View ] |
Date Posted: 14:28:16 01/02/08 Wed Quote: ________________________________ But there was fire in that first kiss. Among the ochres and pinks and semi-tropics of my Charleston home, you caught me under a pink snow of petals falling in waves and drifts in the desert- orange light of gloaming ________________________________ ~ ohhh what a gorgeous visual that is... and all through this beautiful poem is the most breathtaking imagery and swells of emotion, all delicately draped with the slightest whisper of melancholy and that closing is perfect... I love what you've done with this one, Jess...LOVE it!!!! *warm hugs* Sash xx  . [ Post a Reply to This Message ] |
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Author: Janel [ Edit | View ] |
Date Posted: 21:16:44 01/02/08 Wed This is truly impressive Jess, touched my heart deeply and am definitely feeling it. Love it much. [ Post a Reply to This Message ] |
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Author: Lily [ Edit | View ] |
Date Posted: 21:33:30 01/02/08 Wed 'But though the air is lurid and lush, the core of us is still frozen.' this is a glorious write, fullbrimming of elemental emotion.. goodbyes are never easy. i very much enjoyed your Tropics Jess - sestina style.. ~Lily [ Post a Reply to This Message ] |
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Author: andy [ Edit | View ] |
Date Posted: 22:04:05 01/02/08 Wed Jess, Read this twice earlier (and of course before in the other forum). I think it works much better without the constraints you were trying to achieve earlier. Your poetry is always rich in vivid imagery and this one gives up much in the journey down the page. thanks, andy [ Post a Reply to This Message ] |
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Author: Arunansu [ Edit | View ] |
Date Posted: 00:50:18 01/03/08 Thu Jess, I become your fan with this. Thumbs-up! [ Post a Reply to This Message ] |
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Author: Jessica [ Edit | View ] |
Date Posted: 15:34:15 01/06/08 Sun I'm much too slow in giving thanks...this one was was very close to my heart, and I thank you for being so kind to it! Jess [ Post a Reply to This Message ] |
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Author: andy (ROTD Award Chosen by Janel) [ Edit | View ] |
Date Posted: 14:57:01 01/08/08 Tue  Congratulations Jess Janel Has Chosen your Poem as the Muse Mongers Motel Read of the Day  [ Post a Reply to This Message ] |
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Author: Sasha [ Edit | View ] |
Date Posted: 16:34:12 01/08/08 Tue  Congratulations on ROTD, Jess this poem is so very award worthy and I'm glad to see it have the spotlight in Read of the Day love to read you *hugs* Sash xx  . [ Post a Reply to This Message ] |
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Author: Jess [ Edit | View ] |
Date Posted: 17:42:54 01/09/08 Wed I'm honored that you chose this, Janel. Thank you, everyone that read it. You all warm my heart. Much love, Jess [ Post a Reply to This Message ] |
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Author: AnneMarie [ Edit | View ] |
Date Posted: 13:11:55 01/10/08 Thu Congrats and well deserved Jess. I love the imagery you portray. Hugs & Kisses, AnneMarie [ Post a Reply to This Message ] |